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Clauses 10.1.1.2 and 10.1.2.2 --
The first sentence seems very awkward. I'm not sure how to parse the intent of the parenthetical phrase. Is it necessary? Could it be reworded and separated into a second sentence to qualify the first?
Clauses 10.1.1.2, 10.1.1.4.1.1, 10.1.2.2, 10.1.2.4.1.1, 10.1.3.2.1.1, and 10.1.4.1.1.1 --
The example should be modified to read, "… and limits ON the number of printed pages." [Or if you prefer, "TO"]
Clauses 10.1.1.7, 10.1.2.7, and 10.1.3.5 --
Misspelling of security ("secrity")
Clauses 10.1.2.9 10.1.3.7, and 10.1.4.5 --
Why is the text here different to the text in 10.1.1.9? Is there significance to the different wording?
Clause 10.2.1.4 --
Why is the example here different to the ones in 10.1.4.2? Is there significance to the different wording?
General note --
Several of the Clause heading numbers are an extra level deep beyond what they should be. For example, 10.1.1.4.1.1 should only be 10.1.1.4.1.
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