CommentID~CommenterName~CommenterEmail~CommenterPhone~CommenterFax~CommenterCo~Clause~Subclause~Page~Line~CommentType~Comment~SuggestedRemedy~Response~CommentStatus~ResponseStatus
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~00~~~40~E~Overlapping text on the front page~Reformat the text on the first page so that the IEE copyright notice doesn't overlap with the keywords and abstract.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~00~~~48~E~No abstract is listed on the title page~Please provide an abstract for the recommended practice~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~01~1~1~44~T~Shouldn't IEEE Std P802.15.1-2001 be IEEE Std P802.15.1-2002?~Check and change (or not) as appropriate.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~01~1.1~1~49~E~The scope section is not written in complete sentences.~The scope section is required to contain the scope from the PAR, but it is not required that it be a word-for-word replica.  Change the phrases to be sentences by adding subjects and verbs, e.g. change "To develop a ..." to be "The purpose of this document is to provide a ...", change "To suggest modifications to other ..." to be "This recommended practice suggests modifications to other ..." and change "To suggest recommended practices for ..." to be "This document suggests recommended practices for ..."~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~01~1.1~2~4~E~"A future revision of this document ... and WPAN standards." presupposes the approval of a PAR which has not yet been written.~Change "will address" to be "would be required to address" or similar wording.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~01~1.2~2~12~TR~The purpose section does not match the PAR.~The pupose subclause should be taken from sections 7 and 13 of approved version of the PAR (Which appears to be document 99/086r5).  The rest of the text is good, but belongs in an overview clause, perhaps clause 4?~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~01~1.2~2~21~E~802.119 should be either 802.11 or 802.11b~Fix as appropriate~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~02~~2~34~E~802.11 and 802.15.1 both started the References clause on a separate page, just as all of the other clauses start on separate pages.~Have clause 2 start on a separate page.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~02~~2~48~T~We should be able to put in the approved draft here (it is referenced in 1.1).~Find all full references to 802.15.1 (i.e. ones that say IEEE Std 802.15.1 rather than those that just say 802.15.1) and update them to be the appropriate reference for the newly approved standard.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~03~3~3~5~E~"sub clause" should be "subclause"~Please search for and replace all occurances with the correct one.  Thanks to Ian Gifford for pointing out the correct spelling of "subclause" to me.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~03~3.1~3~12~E~All of the definitions are missing a space between the : and the start of the definition.~Insert a space in all definitions.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~03~3.1.6~3~27~E~First letter of sentence is not capitalized.~Capitalize first letter in 3.1.6.  Also fix in 3.1.11 and 3.1.18~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~03~3.1.6~3~28~E~There is a reference to the source of the definition, which is good, but the reference is repeated in multiple definitions, which is bad.  Also the reference is incomplete.~I would suggest a bibliography cross reference here, e.g. "(taken from [B3])".  Ask the project editor (Jennifer) if this is OK.  Change 3.1.6, 3.1.7, 3.1.8, 3.1.11, 3.1.15, 3.1.16 and 3.1.17.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~03~3.1.8~4~14~E~"Master" and "Slave" should not be capitalized.~Lower case the words.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~03~3.1.8~4~14~T~The terms master and slave have not been defined in this document.~Change the definition to state "One type of a point-to-point link between devices in an 802.15.1 piconet." or similar text.  Probably should indicate that it uses slots on a regular basis.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~03~3.2~4~35~E~Need to add space between CSMA/CA and its definition.~I would suggest changing the tab stop for this paragraph format (that is what I did in 802.15.3).~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~03~3.2~4~40~E~Change "inter frame" to either "inter-frame" or "interframe"~I am not sure which one of the two is correct, but it seems that to me that "inter frame" is incorrect.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~03~3.2~4~52~E~LD and LDI: I believe that the L should be for limiter, not limited. In an FSK system, that block is usually referred to as the limiter.~Change to limiter in both LD and LDI~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~03~3.2~5~9~E~PN has an extra comment.~Either delete the parenthetical comment or change to "(e.g. PN code sequence)"~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~03~3.2~5~20~E~SIR: change "interfere" to be "interference"~Change as indicated.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~03~3.2~5~24~E~SNR: Parenthetical comment seems out of place.~I would suggest deleting this here as well as in SINR.  Otherwise, the equation should be added to SIR as well.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~03~3.2~5~15~E~QPSK: Chagne "phase shift" to be "phase-shift"~Change as indicated here as well as in BPSK (p. 4, line 31), DBPSK (p. 4, line 38) and DQPSK (p. 4, line 41).~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~03~3.3~5~33~T~Both packet and packet error rate are definitions and should be in 3.1~Please move to 3.1~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~04~4~6~1~E~Clause 4 should start on an odd page number~Possibly a problem in the page master or page usage.  Could be due to the previous clause.  It took quite some time to exorcise these demons from 802.15.3.  I would be glad to look over the editor's should and offer (possibly useless and annoying) suggestions to fix this.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~04~4~6~4~E~Extra period on the end of the sentence~Delete the extra period.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~04~4.1~6~10~E~Improper capitalization, e.g. "Wireless Local Area Networks".  Also, the text did not use this opportunity to introduce the acronym.~Change to "wireless local area networks (WLANs) and wireless personal area networks (WPANs)" and "2.4 GHz industrial, scientific and medical (ISM) band."  Also change everywhere else it occurs, e.g. page 6 line 26. I clarified this usage with the IEEE project editor, but you are free to ask her as well.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~04~4.1~6~13~E~Should "effect" be "affect"?~Change as indicated.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~04~4.1~6~29~E~Mbit/s splits across lines~Change to Mb/s or make it sit on one line.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~04~4.1~6~42~TR~802.15.1 hops anywhere from 320 to 3200 hops/s depending on the packet type and the mode it is in~Change "at a rate of 1600 hops/second." to be "at a rate than ranges from 320 to 3200 hops/second."~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~04~4.1~6~43~E~Improper capitalization of "master" and "slave"~Lower case all instances except where they appear at the beginning of a sentence.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~04~4.1.1~6~54~TR~802.15.1 hops from 320 to 3200 hops/second.~Change "a hopping rate of 1600 hops/second" to be "hopping rates from 320 to  3200 hops/second" or list the rates as 320, 533, 1600 and 3200 hops/second.  Also change "160 times" on page 7 line 1 to be "between 32 and 320 times"~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~04~4.1.1~7~10~E~Change "effects" to "affects"~Make the change here and throughout the document as appropriate.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~04~4.1.2~7~31~E~Extra comma~Change to "can vary significantly for packets carrying"~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~04~4.1.4~8~19~E~"... SCO link can cause voice quality ..." The use of the word "can" is deprecated in the standards.  It isn't as bad as "must", but it should probably be avoided to avoid confusing it with "may"~I would suggest replacing "can" with something else, I used "is able to" in most cases.  For this sentence, it could be rewritten as "An increase in the packet error ratio for a SCO link would cause voice quality degredation."~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~04~4.2~8~25~E~OPNET should probably have TM at its first usage and have a disclaimer somewhere in the text that says who owns this trademark.~Add TM and the ownership disclaimer.  The WPAN^TM disclaimer needs to be added as well.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~04~4.3~8~39~E~Improper capitalization.~Lower case "collaborative", "non" and "non-collaborative" in this paragraph.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~04~4.3.1~8~51~TR~802.15.1 hops from 320 to 1600 hops/second~Change "at a rate of 1600 hops/second" to be "at rates of 320 to 1600 hops/second"~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~05~5.4.3~25~9~TR~The word "must" is used.  This word should not be used in an IEEE standard.  If the usage is meant to imply a requirement, then the correct word is shall.  Otherwise the wording should be changed to avoid using this word.~Remove all occurances of the word must (other than in the copyright notice on the first page, thanks to K. Siwiak for finding that one).  If the usage is meant to be a requirement, replace it with a "shall".  Otherwise reword the sentence.  I will help in the rewording if required.  A partial list of other occurances of the word are: page 26 line 54, page 42 line 17, page 43 line 29, page 44 line 16, page 48 lines 50 and 52, page 49 lines 1 and 4, page 50 lines 1,2, 3 and 17, page 55 line 26, page 64 line 25, page 76 lines 4, 13, 42 and 43.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~04~4.4~9~28~E~Improper capitalization of "Physical"~Lower case the word.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~05~5~9~37~E~Clause 5 does not start on its own page.~Please start clause 5 on its own page.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~05~5.1~9~50~E~The figure cross references have an extra dash following them.~Change the format of the cross reference to remove the dash.  You should be able to do it to one clause and then import that feature across all of the clauses to fix it everwhere.  Fix here and all other occurances in the document.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~05~5.3.3~13~3~TR~The method used to calculate the spectrum factor is not defined in this subclause, or anywhere else in the document~Please define how the various parameters were combined to attain the spectrum factors.  Also, does the combination include Barker code gain as well?  If so, how is it added in?~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~05~5.3.6.1~14~45~TR~The BER calculation for 802.15.1 is presented for orthogonal FSK (since it is readily available).  However, 802.15.1 does not use orthogonal FSK~Need to add text here that indicates that 802.15.1 does not use orthogonal FSK and that the equation is simply a convenient approximation.  The actual BERs will be higher for the lower modulation indices for a given SINR.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~05~5.4.2.2~22~40~E~Missing space between encodes and \phi\sub{1}~Add space~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~05~5.4.2.2~23~4~E~The bibliographic cross reference using the author's last name detracts from the sentence flow.~Unless there is a specific reason to reference the last name, the text flows better with just [Bxx].  If the editor wishes to keep in the last name, in this sentence it would read better if the reference were set off by a comma, e.g. "... for practical implementation, Van Nee [B15], the sub-optimal ..." Also, there is a space missing between "Nee" and "[B15]" in two places.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~05~5.4.2.3~23~32~E~Missing space in "[B2]for" and "multislit" should be "multi-slit".  This discussion is good, but it should precede the 5.5 Mb/s mode discussion.~Add space and hyphen.  Move discussion prior to the discussion of 5.5 Mb/s mode.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~06~6~29~8~E~"Baseband" should be lower case~Lower case please.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~06~6~29~8~E~The cross-reference to the Bluetooth specification is broken~Change this to [Bxx] or the cross reference to 802.15.1.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~06~6.2~29~47~E~Bluetooth spelled wrong.  Also the sentence is a little strange.  The last sentence really should end in a colon.~Just delete it here, 802.15.1 specifies everything needed for this section.  The sentence should say perhaps "The IEEE 802.15.1 hopping patter has been implemented as a part of an OPNET model. Details of the algorithm are as follows:"~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~06~6.2~29~50~T~The model uses only 32 of the 79 hopping frequencies at a time with no justification.~Please provide a reason in the text that states why a window of 79 frequencies was not used.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~06~6.2~30~1~E~Gratuitous use of capitalization.~Please lower case "Base-Hopping" and "Direct Sequence"~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~06~6~29~1~TR~The actual OPNET model used is not provided in the draft.~The OPNET model needs to be available in two ways: 1) a picture of the model appropriate for use in the tool should be included in the draft. 2) The draft should contain a pointer to where people can download the actual files that make up the model.  This pointer could be in the bibliography, but there needs to be a reference to it in clause 6.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~07~7~31~48~E~"inter arrival" should be "inter-arrival"~Add hyphen as indicated.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~08~8~32~1~E~Clause 8 does not start on an odd page.  Actually, clauses 7 and 8 are to small to be clauses.  They should proably be a part of the MAC clause 6.  Otherwise, they could be a part of clause 9.  Clause 9 needs to start on an odd page number, all by itself.~Please fix clause page starts, merge 7 and 8 and give them a nice, warm home somewhere.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~09~9~34~5~E~DSSS and FHSS have already been defined, no need to spell it out here.  "Mobile" should be lower case everywhere it appears.~Delete the words, leave only the two acronyms, DSSS and FHSS.  Lower case "Mobile".  Better still, use STA instead of "mobile device" since that is what 802.11 uses.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~09~9.1~34~16~E~Guidance from the IEEE project editor.  The proper usage of units is: "The distance is given in meters." and "The distance is 0.5 m."~Change "meters" to "m" here and everywhere in the draft where it is used as an "adjective" to a number.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~09~9.1~35~21~E~Change "... is double than when it is ..." to be "... is double that when it is ..."~Change as indicated.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~09~9.1~35~48~E~Extra space between "rate trends"?~Check if an additional space crept in (possible when you paste in text from other sources)~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~09~9.1~35~50~E~Change "... 1.5 meters is 150 ms, that is an order of magnitude greater than the delay at 2 meters that is around 18 ms." to be "... 1.5 m is 150 ms, which is almost an order of magnitude greater than the delay at 2 m, which is around 18 ms."~Please change as indicated.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~09~9.2~36~24~E~Extra space in "error rate  (20%) for"?  Also might be one at "1 and 2.  The effect ...", in "the packet error rate  for" on page 37, lines 20 and 22, also check "packet error rate  observed", page 37, line 27.  It seems like packet error rate has an extra space everywhere, so I would suggest searching on those words.~Check and remove if present.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~09~9.3~39~49~E~The sentence reads better without the delay in parentheses.~Change the end of the sentence to read "... high delays, 230 ms, as shown in Figure 29.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~10~10~40~26~E~Bluetooth is referenced (with TM) in the footnote, but ownership of the trademark has not been indicated.~Remove the space between Bluetooth and TM.  If you want to keep the reference to it (not necessary IMHO), then add the standard "Bluetooth is a a trademarke owned by the Bluetooth SIG, blah, blah, blah" to the front of the draft.  See 802.15.1 or 802.15.3 D09 for examples.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~10~10~40~31~E~PHY and MAC have already been introduced, no need to spell them out here.  On line 37, the words for AWMA should not be capitalized.~Your call on thie first item, but everyone who has read this far should know what a MAC and PHY are.Please lower case "alternating wireless medium access"~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~10~10~40~49~T~The text uses "can" which might be confused as formal language, which is it not.~I would suggest changing "can" to be "is able to" in the first sentence.  In the second sentence, just say "The PTA technique supports 802.15.1 SCO links."~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~10~10~40~21~E~Clause 10 should start on its own, odd page number~Please change starting page.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~10~10.1~41~37~T~Tx is not listed as an acronym.~Add Tx to the acronym page.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~10~10.1~41~48~E~"And such" should be "As such".  Missing space in "Recommendation:Thus"~Change wording as indicated and add space.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~10~10.1~42~4~E~Change "the medium on dynamically" to be "the medium dynamically"~Please change as indicated.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~10~10.1~42~6~E~Missing space in "Recommendation:Thus"~Please add space.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~10~10.2~42~34~TR~The text for TBTT is not centered under its mark in the figure~Please move the label so that it is centered under the mark in the figure.  Its current position gives a false impression of where it is supposed to be.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~10~10.2.1~43~1~E~Access Point should be AP~Please replace with acronym.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~10~10.2.1~43~5~E~Gratuitous use of capitalization.  "Medium Free", "True" and "Medium"~Please lower case here and at other occurances as appropriate.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~10~10.2.2.1.1~44~1~TR~The term TU is not in the acronyms list nor is it defined in this document. ~Need to define TU and add to the acronym list.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~10~10.2.2.1.1~43~47~E~The formatting for the MLME primitives could be improved (IMHO)~I have a frame paragraph style (LME Command) for doing MLMEs that looks a lot like 802.11.  I would be happy to share with the TE of 802.15.2.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~10~10.2.2.2.1~44~42~E~Change "of these parameters are shown" to be "of this parameter is shown"~Please change as indicated.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~10~10.2.2.3.1~45~29~E~The font for "FALSE" in the valid range column appears to be wrong.~Please check and correct if necessary.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~10~10.2.2.3.2~45~33~TR~SME has not been defined. (This is true for 10.2.2.1.2 as well.)~Define SME in the acronym section.  Put a cross reference at the start of this subclause that points to the appropriate figure in 802.11 that defines the various layer managment entities.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~10~10.2.2.6.2~48~4~TR~Cut and paste error, in the Note column change "Beacon frames" to be "Probe Response frames"~Change as indicated~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~10~10.2.2.6.4~48~44~E~The WPAN interval field explanation precedes the figure rather than following the figure.~Move the two sentences "The WBAN ... minus the WPAN interval." to be after the figure as is the convention for the rest of the 802.11 information elements.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~10~10.2.3~48~52~~The text lists multiple devices and uses improper language.~Change "The WPAN devices" to be "The WPAN device" and change "nodes must be a WPAN" to be "nodes shall be a WPAN" if this is intended to be a requirement.  Otherwise, change it to "nodes need to be a WPAN"~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~10~10.2.3~48~53~E~ACL has already been introduced, no need to spell it out here.~Remove words, leave acronym.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~10~10.2.3~49~4~TR~The word "must" needs to be "shall" here.~Change "must be larger" to be "shall be large"~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~10~10.2.3~49~26~E~SCO has been introduced already, just use the acronym.  Change "can not" to be "is not able to".~Please change as indicated.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~10~10.2.3~49~29~TR~Improper use of "can"~Change "can either be" to be "may either be".  Please review use of "can" throughout the document and replace with either "may", "is able to", or equivalent wording changes depending on the context.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~10~10.2.3~50~9~E~Change "till" to be "until"~Please change as indicated.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~10~10.2.4~50~23~T~Change "in AWMA the IEEE 802.11 Access Point can transmit" to be "in AWMA is that the IEEE 802.11 AP may transmit"~Please change as indicated.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~10~10.2.4~50~29~TR~Informal language~Change "The Clear-to-Send ... group)." to be "The CTS packet shall be addressed to its own 802.11 MAC address and the group address bit shall be set to the multicast group."~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~10~10.3~50~45~E~Extra space in "pattern.   At any time"?~Remove extra space if present.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~10~10.3.1~51~20~T~The table indicates that a packet "will be received with errors" while the text says that it depends on the parameters of the system.~Change "will be" to be "might be" in the first two entries and change "packet is received" to be "packet might be received" in the third entry.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~10~10.3.3~52~41~E~Missing spaces, "activity.The decision" and "receiving .Additional state"~Please add the spaces.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~10~10.3.4~53~36~~Extra capitalization in "802.15.1 Baseband" (line 21) and "802.11b Control" (2 places)~Lower case the words.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~00~All~~~E~All of the paragraphs ended up in the bookmarks of the PDF file, rather than just the chapter headings.~Please restrict the items added to the bookmarks of the PDF.  I would be willing to show the TE how to do this.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~10~10.3.5~55~7~E~Font size problem in Table 24, second column second row.  Also, missing space in "havegreater" in Table 25, column 2, 4th row.~Fix font size and add space.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~10~10.3.6~57~5~E~Three things: Missing period in column 2, row 2.  Question mark not on same line in column 2, row 3. "Slave" should be "slave" in column 2, row 4.~Please add period, connect question mark to sentence and lower case word.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~10~10.3.8~57~29~TR~Informal language uses can instead of may which is required.~Change "can" to "may" in the following places: page 57 lines 29, 40 and 47 and page 58 line 3.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~10~10.4~58~16~E~Extra space in "transmitter.   This knowledge" and "layer solution.   This"Actually, there is too much space at the end of all of the sentences in 10.4, most likely due to pasting from Word.Also 10.4.1, page 59 line 41.~Remove extra space.  Ask me how if you have questions.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~10~10.4.1~59~41~E~iT is not set off and a space is missing in "as[B4]"~The best way is to italicize "iT" and change it to "iT_c" since that is how it is in the equation.  Add space.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~10~10.4.1~60~8~E~Space missing in "equations[B3][B4]."  Also, this section has too much space following the period between sentences.~Add spaces in the text, delete the extra ones between the sentences.~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~11~11~61~32~E~Missing articles and some text.~Change "interference from 802.11b network, packet error rate  will be" to be "interference from an 802.11b network, then the PER will be" (note extra space between rate and will).~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~11~11.1.1~61~53~E~Orphaned text, doesn't belong here.~Delete "Methods of adaptive packet selection."~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~11~11.1.1~62~16~E~"different" is redundant and the article is missing.  The next sentence needs some help too.~Change to "The packets differ mostly in the FEC code" and the next sentence to start with "The ability to choose differet packet types ..."~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~11~11.1.2~62~50~E~Sentence doesn't flow.~Change the start of the sentence to be "Choosing a packet type"~~X~O
0~Gilb, James~gilb@ieee.org~858-538-3903~858-229-4822~Appairent Technologies~12~12~70~3~E~Missing spaces around colons.~Add spaces following the colons in this list, e.g. "Discover: AFH"~~X~O
