[802SEC] Comments on 802.11bb PAR
Dear 802.11 members
I have the following comments on the LC PAR and CSD
PAR
5.2b
o The scope should state if this is free space or fiber communications
o The scope should state the target distance for the links. If
there is a range of distances, list them.
o "coexistance", should be "coexistence"
5.4
o I believe the correct response here is "This amendment will not
have a purpose clause." instead of the text "This amendment does not
change the “Purpose” clause of IEEE 802.11"
5.5
o Delete "significant"
6.1.b.
o If the answer here is yes, you need to provide an explanation.
7.1
o Verify that the titles of the 802.15 standards are correct. They
seem to be incorrect.
8.1
o "Requitements" should be "Requirements"
CSD
1.2.1
o Spell out IR
o "IEEE P802.11aj and P802.11ay" should be "IEEE Std 802.11aj and
IEEE P802.11ay"
o "underutilised" should be "underutilized"
o Missing blank line after first paragraph in b) and extra blank
lines at the end of the subsection
1.2.3
o Add "IEEE" in front of 802. (line 21)
o Add "IEEE" in front of 802.11 (5 locations)
o Add "IEEE" in front of 802.15 (2 locations)
1.2.4
o The purpose of the CSD is to enable the reviewer to evaluate the
proposed project. Placing a significant amount of the content in
external documents is not responsive to the question. Provide a short
list of the work that demonstrates the hardware feasibility and then
point to a document for more information.
o Delete "significant" in "significant variety"
o In b), the existence of the mature 802.11 technology is not
relevant to this project. You are supposed to answer regarding the
proposed addition, which has not been tested. Focus here on listing
similar technology in this section, e.g., LC type devices, that already
exist. Again, placing essentially all of the content in an external
document is not helpful.
o Delete "The amendment will use modeling and simulation as tools for
evaluating performance metrics." The question is asking if there is
_currently_ simulation and modeling to support technical feasibility.
1.2.5
o Missing line after first paragraph in a)
o Change "emoding" to be "implementing"
o Missing line after first paragraph in b)
o Missing line after first paragraph in d)
o Extra blank lines at the end.
o Delete all of the text following e). Answering e) is optional
(answering any of a-d is optional as well). Also, the text does not
address economic feasibility.
James Gilb
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