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RE: 3 July 2012 Agenda

Bob and colleagues,

 

Rereading the latest draft of the standard, we are very close. My editorial comments follow.

 

Alex Schneider

 

  1. Section 1.1, page 1, needs to have its right margin justified.
  2. There are numerous references to Clause X or Clause X and Y or the like. These should be searched out and resolved.
  3. Section 1.4.1.1, line 3:  “contains the power delivers pins…”  Should it be “power delivery pins”?
  4. Section 1.6, line 35. “The cable is orientation independent…”  Is this correct? It can be inserted in two orientations 180 deg apart, but not at 90 degrees.
  5. Section 1.6, line 38:  instead of “difficult to access locations” I suggest either “inaccessible locations” or “locations not easily accessible”.
  6. I believe our vote to remove the conformance section 14 implies removal of section 1.7.
  7. Section 3, page 8,, line 23, defining “bus failure” : if only two failure causes are listed they should be joined by “or” rather than a comma.
  8. Section 3, page 8: the footnote about availability of the IEEE Dictionary appears twice.
  9. Several numbered lines are blank: 2, 3, 7 on page 8, 18,21, 43, 45 on page 9, 4, 6, 11, 14, 16 on page 10, etc.
  10. Figure 5-1 illustrates, among other UPAMD connected devices, a 3 to 20 w lamp. Do we need to explicitly say someplace that application of devices of less than 10 watts is acceptable if the devices are intended for use with a device such as a laptop whose primary power interface(s) are UPAMD compliant?
  11. Section 5, page 13, lines 10 and 11. “Normally, at least one port that attaches to nominal grid power using a connector appropriate to that power source.” This is not a complete sentence, and vehicle power, other battery power, or even independent generation may be the power source.
  12. Section 5.2, p 14, lines 16 and 17. “This enumeration form the final arbitration element is all other priority items are identical.” I think what is meant is “This enumeration forms the final arbitration element if all other priority items are identical.”
  13. Page 17, line 13 – is reference to IEEE Registration Authority still valid?
  14. Why is “output” capitalized in headers k) and l) (lines 25 and 34) when “input” is not capitalized in headers m0, n) and o)  (line 43, lines 4 and 8 on following page)?
  15. Pages 20-21, lines 37 – 3, field “t)” – is the device certification number appropriate? This issue will also affect section 5.4.2, Example State Tables.
  16. Section 6.4, p. 25, line 10 – replace “ad” with “at”.
  17. Pages 29-30, Table 7-2. This table should not be split across pages. On lines “x10xxxx” and “x1xx0xx” the words “not” and “no” should have only their first letters capitalized.
  18. {age 37, line 4:  replace “possible” with “possibly” before “at a lower speed, etc.”
  19. Section 8.4, page 38 – are Device Certification Reference Numbers” obsolete? How about EUIs? Vendors?
  20. Pages 64 and 65 --  Table 9-6 should not flow across page break.
  21. Sections 10, and subsections -- right margin is not justified.
  22. Pages 70, 71 – figure spills over to next page.
  23. Page 75, lines 38-40 “if we define …” seems more like conversation than a standard.
  24. Page 84, line 25 – replace “coffee, tea, rain, adult beverages” with “rain, beverages or other liquids”. Some listed beverages may be unacceptable in certain cultures.
  25. Line 30 – “Blind mate friendly –it possible” – “if possible”?
  26. Pages 87-88 – figure 12-2 caption separated from figure. Keep table 12-2 on one page. Unnecessary blank row at bottom.
  27. Page 91, two cells in first row of table 13-1 oddly formatted. It appears that the cells are fully justified.
  28. Page 92 – delete section 14 per tonight’s vote.
  29. Page 93, line 26. “…wherever we happened to be…” would be better as “…wherever the device is being used…”.
  30. What is intended for Appendix C, Bibliography?

From: upamd@xxxxxxxx [mailto:upamd@xxxxxxxx] On Behalf Of Bob Davis
Sent: Tuesday, July 03, 2012 12:27 AM
To: upamd@xxxxxxxx
Subject: 3 July 2012 Agenda

 

UPAMD,

 

The agenda for the 3 July meeting is as follows:

 

Note the pushing forward with the draft following a decision on Conformity. 

 

I have had excellent input from Paul, Edgar, Alex, and Andy and others on the draft but this is now dwindled and I believe we should move forward with the project.  More comments will come out of the Working Group Ballot process. 

 

Following the decision on Conformity, I will modify the draft accordingly and then submit to the mandatory editorial review by the IEEE editors. I expect some work will come out of that review as it gets closer to a publishable document.

 

Due to Paul Panepinto’s resignation as chair of the Power Subcommittee due to changing work requirements, I am seeking a new Power Subcommittee Chair. This position will be important through the balloting process both at the Working Group level and the Sponsor Ballot level.

 

Universal Power Adapter for Mobile Devices (UPAMD) Working Group

 

Start Time: 3 July 2012 5:00 P.M. PDT UTC-8 (0000GMT/Zulu 4 July 2012)

http://www.timeanddate.com/worldclock/fixedtime.html?msg=UPAMD+Working+Group+Meeting&iso=20120703T17&p1=283&ah=1&am=30

World Wide Local Dial in telephone numbers see Intercall’s list  

This will be a WebEx meeting

WebEx Meeting Number: 592 864 169, https://intercall.webex.com/intercall/j.php?J=592864169

Call-in toll-free number: 1-866-349-5441 (US/Canada) Conference Code: 674 283 3856

Dial-Back should be working again.

 

Preliminary Agenda

 

Call to Order   UPAMD Working Group meeting    - Bob Davis                      0000Z 4 July 2012

  1. Introductions/Attendance
  2. Approval of Agenda
  3. Approval of Minutes from 19 June 2012 meeting see Minutes –
  4. IEEE Patent slides presented. See https://development.standards.ieee.org/myproject/Public/mytools/mob/slideset.pdf

V.  Communications Subcommittee – Edgar Brown

a.         Review Subcommittee Chair presentation and subcommittee progress.

b.         Draft restructure progress

VI. Power Subcommittee

a.         Review Subcommittee Chair presentation and subcommittee progress.

b.         Seeking replacement for Paul Panepinto to continue chairing this subcommittee. Paul has submitted his resignation due to changing job duties and time demands.

VII.   Connector Subcommittee – Mark Anderson

a.         Target definition and target pin surface shape

b.         Target definition for optical link study – Statement of Objective

VIII. Conformity/Certification Subcommittee – Bob Noseworthy

a.         Review the Industry Connection proposal – Leonard Tsai

b.         Vote on removal of Conformity clause from P1823 Working Draft

i.   Keep Certificate Number as RFU with current value of 0.

IX. New Business

a.         Submit current draft, modified per vote above, and any additional working group input, for MEC (Mandatory Editorial Coordination) with IEEE staff.

b.         Motion to proceed to start Working Group Ballot process following MEC.

c.         Review of Working Group Ballot Process.

X.  UPAMD Working Group Meeting Schedule:

a.         17 July 2012 at the 5PM Pacific time slot

b.         31 July 2012 at the 5PM Pacific time slot

XI. Other concerns of the group

a.         Subcommittee meetings are scheduled in same time slot as Working Group meeting.

i.   Connector Committee – same week on Thursday.

ii. Communication Committee meets following week on Tuesday

iii.                    Conformity Committee – meets following week on Wednesday

iv.                    Power Committee - meets following week,  on Thursday

XII.   Adjournment.

 

Please send any changes or additions to Bob Davis bobd@xxxxxxxx.

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Respectfully;

 

Bob Davis

Chair UPAMD/P1823

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