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Re: [802SEC] +++ ECM (early close) +++ ballot on Liaison to ISO/IEC JTC1/SC6 Re: PWI for Deterministic Wireless Industrial Network Ballot opens 2022-01-25

Hello Roger,

I appreciate your comments. I expect that most if not all your editorial suggestions will be accepted as part of the final editing.

Regarding the text change proposed as the basis of your negative vote,  I accept that the first sentence potentially can be improved; however I don't think the proposed sentence is quite there.

<snip>
Current sentence:
IEEE 802 requests that ISO/IEC JTC1/SC6/WG1 focus its industrial networking efforts on assisting IEEE 802 to refine its solutions, rather than focusing efforts on yet another wireless network solution.

RBM proposed replacement:

 IEEE 802 suggests that the goals of ISO/IEC JTC1/SC6/WG1 in industrial networking would be most efficiently achieved by engagement with IEEE 802 and aiding in the refinement of IEEE 802 technology. 

[Note: The comment on this sentence is the only basis of my Disapprove vote.]


Comment:

The proposed text "IEEE 802 suggests that the goals" implies that 802 knows what the goals of of WG1 are. We do not.
Is the underlying issue use of the work "requests"?
Perhaps something along the lines of:
"IEEE 802 invites ISO/IEC/JTC1/SC6/WG1 to engage with IEEE 802 to refine IEEE 802 technology based solutions."
or
"IEEE 802 invites ISO/IEC/JTC1/SC6/WG1 to assist IEEE 802 in refining its solutions, rather than focusing efforts on a separate, potentially overlapping solution."

Dorothy

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Dorothy Stanley

Hewlett Packard Enterprise

dorothy.stanley@hpe.com

+1 630-363-1389


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Subject: Re: [802SEC] +++ ECM (early close) +++ ballot on Liaison to ISO/IEC JTC1/SC6 Re: PWI for Deterministic Wireless Industrial Network Ballot opens 2022-01-25
 
Dorothy,

I vote Disapprove. I’ve attached comments. My Disapprove is based only on the final paragraph. The rest of the comments are editorial.

Cheers,

Roger
On Jan 25, 2022, 12:05 PM -0700, Stanley, Dorothy <dorothy.stanley@hpe.com>, wrote:
Dear EC members,

Per the 'early close' provision in the 802 Operations Manual subclause 4.1.2, this motion is to approve a liaison to ISO/IEC JTC1 SC6 WG1 re: the Preliminary Work Item (PWI) proposal
in SC6/WG1 for a new Deterministic Wireless Industrial Network. Paul Nikolich has delegated conduct of this ballot to me.

Ballot Open: Tuesday January 25th at 7PM UTC (2PM Eastern) for 10 days, with early close.

Motion:

Liaise 11-22-0081r6 to ISO/IEC JTC1/SC6 in relation to the Preliminary Work Item (PWI) proposal in SC6/WG1 for a new Deterministic Wireless Industrial Network, with editorial privileges given to the Chair.

Moved: Stanley

Seconded: Rosdahl

WG11 Result: Y/N/A:  82/2/34


Please let me know of any questions.

Thanks,

Dorothy

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Dorothy Stanley

Hewlett Packard Enterprise

dorothy.stanley@hpe.com

+1 630-363-1389


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