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Bob, Thank you for turning around such
a polished revision so quickly. I have reviewed the revisions
incorporated at last night’s meeting and offer the following comments. Section 11.4.1 You did an
excellent job of minimizing our exposure to accusations of “commercialism”
with regard to the Mill-Max pins. Section 11.4.2 and subsequent. Values
in grams to one or two significant figures (60 and 75) have been rendered
considerably more precise by conversion to Newtons. (0.588, 0.74 respectively).
I suggest that 0.6 N and 0.75 N are sufficiently precise. The same comment
applies to Table 11-1 and to material below Table 12-3 on page 99. Section 11.7. I had previously
suggested deletion of several words, which was done, but also deletion of “that”
from the second and third sentences. The word “that” converts the
rest of the sentences to subordinate clauses modifying the subject, “position”,
but there then is no verb in the sentence. When “that” is removed, “will
support” and “will firmly attach” become future tense verbs
and we have complete sentences. On the line immediately below
Figure 12-1, we have the following sentence. “Other possible cable
constructions for this speciation has been designed that is functionally
equivalent.” The subject “constructions” is plural, so the
verb must be as well. The sentence should read “Other possible cable
constructions for this speciation have been designed that are functionally
equivalent.” Alex From: upamd@xxxxxxxx
[mailto:upamd@xxxxxxxx] On Behalf Of Bob Davis UPAMD, There is a
marked up pdf version of the UPAMD Draft standard available on the
website. The updated comment file is also there. See http://grouper.ieee.org/groups/msc/upamd/private/UPAMDDrafts/UPAMD_P1823Draft_201209190900markup.pdf
One set of changes are still coming from Mark. I hope
to complete this today. Respectfully; Bob Davis Summit Computer Systems, Inc. bobd@xxxxxxxx 408.353.5990 desk 408.857.1273 cell |